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Incoming request:
"Here's the intro and first body paragraph of my Comp 101 argumentative essay. Prompt was 'Should college athletes be paid?' Due Friday. Can you check if it's any good?"

Student draft submitted:
"In today's society, college athletes are a very important part of universities all across the country. Many people believe they should get paid, while others disagree. This essay will talk about both sides and show why athletes deserve compensation. First of all, college athletes bring in a lot of money for their schools. The NCAA makes billions of dollars every year. This money comes from TV deals and ticket sales and merchandise. Athletes work very hard and practice a lot, so it makes sense that they should get some of it."

Essay Feedback Agent — run output:

Rubric applied: Comp 101 Argumentative (Argument / Structure / Clarity), 4-point scale.

Argument — 2/4
▸ Your thesis hedges. "Show both sides AND show why athletes deserve compensation" tries to do two jobs. An argumentative thesis needs one claim. Suggested revision to draft yourself: "College athletes should receive direct compensation because they generate revenue they currently see none of." Note I'm giving you the shape, not the sentence — swap in your own reasoning.
▸ Body paragraph 1 asserts "work hard and practice a lot" as the payoff. That's an appeal, not evidence. Your strongest point is already in the paragraph (they generate the revenue) — lead with that, and cut the effort argument or move it lower.

Structure — 2/4
▸ Intro is 60% throat-clearing. "In today's society... very important part of... all across the country" delays your actual claim to sentence 3. Try opening on the money figure — it earns attention.
▸ The body paragraph has a claim and a fact but no link sentence explaining how NCAA revenue obligates payment to players. That's the missing hinge. Add one sentence after "billions every year."

Clarity — 2/4
▸ Filler flags: "in today's society," "a lot of," "very important," "talk about." Each is a place to be specific.
▸ "This money comes from TV deals and ticket sales and merchandise" — polysyndeton reads rushed. Use commas and a serial "and."

Priority for your revision pass:
1. Rewrite thesis as one claim.
2. Add the hinge sentence linking revenue to obligation.
3. Cut the four filler phrases above.

Honest limitation:
I scored what you sent — an intro and one body paragraph. I can't evaluate whether your full argument holds, addresses counterarguments, or lands a conclusion, because those aren't here. Send the complete draft and I'll re-score all three criteria across the whole thing. I also won't rewrite passages for you — every fix above is a direction you execute, which keeps the work yours.